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A teenage girl,
Writing waiting wearily wondering
Despising depressing deepening darkening
Cold comfort calms calamity
Hatred for humanity here and now
Never knowing only growing
Grasping groping
Hoping
For finding
Lost red roses risen
Lying prying into a pale pallet plate
A lowly lonely lamp
Dimmed deep desolation depression
Weeping wanting wallowing waiting
Only a thought brought
Sought but never bought
Deep dark desolate depravity
Cutting killing calmly slowly.
©2003-2009 ~appelezmoidante-
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Author's Comments

Alliteration n. The use of the same consonant at the beginning of each stressed syllable in a line of verse.

Repetition n. The act or process or an instance of repeating or being repeated.

Rhythm n. The pattern or flow of sound created by the arrangement of stressed and unstressed syllables in accentual verse or of long and short syllables in quantitative verse.

Rhyme n. Correspondence of terminal sounds of words or of lines of verse.

Symbolism n. The practice of representing things by means of symbols or of attributing symbolic meanings or significance to objects, events, or relationships.
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:iconnathanyel:
Alliteration, the simpliest yet most amazing style method (don't know the correct term for that)

/me likes
:iconnz:
//somehow it resembles alice, from.. alice in wonderland.
-nz


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:iconrebelchic:
Again I was swept away with this. The use of alliteration was just breathtaking. The end 4 lines were my favorite.

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:iconignite:
this is something i was looking to read tonight. your repetitive use of alliteration throughout the poem was quite unique and definately gave the poem a nice beat. i agree with ~rebelchic in that the last 4 lines i enjoyed most.

nice job.
:iconfeelingblue:
nice wording, nice rhyming, nice rythym and beat. Nice everything.... I like it :) (Smile)

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January 10, 2003

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